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Before the First Pitch: Writing with the Five Senses

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Before the First Pitch: Writing with the Five Senses

Spot and choose concrete words that make a game-day job come alive.

Read the story

Read the story. Notice what the writer sees, hears, smells, tastes and feels.

Game Day at the Ballpark

1The ballpark was silent when Mom and I walked through the gate at six in the morning. Rows of empty blue seats stared down at the field. Mom is the head groundskeeper, and today, for the first time, I got to be her helper.

2First, Mom started the big riding mower. It roared to life and shook the seat under me as we rode together. Behind us, the grass lay in light and dark stripes, as neat as the lines on notebook paper. The sharp, green smell of cut grass filled my nose and made me sneeze.

3Next, we raked the infield. The reddish-brown dirt crunched under my sneakers, and the wooden rake handle rubbed my palms until they felt warm and tingly. Mom sprayed the dirt with a hose. "Water keeps the dust from blowing into the players' eyes," she explained. Soon the dirt turned dark and smelled like a flowerpot after watering.

4Then came my favorite job. Mom filled a rolling cart with white chalk, and I pushed it slowly along a tight string from home plate toward the outfield. A puff of powder rose with every step, and the chalk tickled the back of my throat. When I looked back, a bright white line stretched across the grass as straight as a ruler.

5By noon, the sun was baking the bleachers, and the buttery smell of popcorn drifted from the snack stand. Mom handed me a bottle of water so cold that it made my teeth ache.

6That night, I sat in the stands and bit into a warm, salty pretzel. When the umpire shouted, "Play ball!" the crowd cheered so loudly that I felt it in my chest. I looked at the stripes and the chalk lines and grinned. Everyone could see the field, but only I knew how it had smelled at sunrise.

Find the sensory details

Use the story to answer each question.

1.
Match each detail from the story to the sense it appeals to.
2.
Read paragraph 2 again. Underline the sentence that helps the reader see what the mowed grass looked like.

3.
Circle the two words in this sentence from paragraph 3 that tell how the writer's palms felt.

4.
Which detail from paragraph 4 helps the reader feel what the chalk was like?
Question 4 options
5.
In paragraph 6, the writer says the crowd cheered "so loudly that I felt it in my chest." What does this detail help the reader understand?
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Choose precise words

Pick and write words that tell exactly what happened.

6.
Sort the phrases. Which ones use concrete, sensory words, and which ones are vague?
7.
Write the sensory word that fits each sentence. Use each word from the word bank once.

The crowd when the ball flew over the fence.
The popcorn made me very thirsty.
Gravel under the tires of the mower.
Drops of water ran down the side of my bottle.

8.
Which sentence uses the most precise words to tell about the mower?
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9.
Revise this sentence with concrete words and at least one sensory detail: "The snack stand smelled good."
10.
Think of a time you watched someone at work, such as a cook, a mail carrier or a crossing guard. Write 2 or 3 sentences about it. Use details for at least two senses.