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Two Fundraisers, One Class Trip

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Two Fundraisers, One Class Trip

Plan and revise an informative comparison using relevant evidence.

Read and evaluate

Read the student essay. All costs and estimates belong to this fictional class planning scenario; they are not research findings.

Postcard Orders or a Trivia Evening?

1Our eighth-grade class is considering two ways to raise money for a class trip: selling student-designed postcards through advance orders or holding a trivia evening. Both proposals involve work outside regular lessons, but they use money, time, and volunteer effort differently. Comparing these features gives classmates a clearer picture than simply asking which event sounds more enjoyable. The estimates below describe plans, not guaranteed results.

2The postcard team would display sample designs and collect paid orders before requesting a print run. Printing would cost $80 for the batch described in the proposal. If all the cards in that batch sold, sales would bring in $240, leaving $160 after printing. The team could reduce the batch if advance orders were low. However, students would still need to check orders carefully, package the cards, and arrange delivery.

3The trivia team would reserve the community room for one evening. The room fee would be $60, and supplies would cost another $40. The room fee would be due before ticket sales began and would not be refunded if the event were canceled. With the proposed ticket sales, the event would bring in $300, leaving $200 after those two expenses. That larger estimate depends on enough people buying tickets; it does not show what the class would earn with a smaller audience.

4The proposals also distribute work differently. Postcard tasks could be completed by small groups on several afternoons, although someone would need to track the orders from start to finish. Trivia would require hosts, ticket checkers, and setup volunteers during the same evening. Students with evening responsibilities could help prepare questions beforehand, but they might not be available to run the event. Neither proposal includes an estimate of total volunteer hours, so the class cannot yet compare how much money each plan might raise per hour of work.

5These differences suggest useful questions for the planning meeting. For postcards, students need to confirm the order deadline and delivery schedule. For trivia, they need to check volunteer availability and likely ticket demand. The projected earnings favor trivia, while advance postcard orders allow the print quantity to respond to demand. A final decision should account for both the money the class might keep and the conditions needed to earn it.

1.
Which comparison does the draft support about money committed before sales are known?
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2.
In paragraph 3, underline the sentence establishing that the trivia team would lose the room payment if it canceled.

3.
Which revision would most clearly preview the essay's main comparison criteria at the end of paragraph 1?
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4.
A writer wants readers to compare the same feature of both plans immediately. Which body outline best achieves that goal?
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5.
Sort these proposed additions by whether they would help explain the financial or staffing differences between the plans.

Revise the explanation

Use the draft's evidence. Keep the writing informative rather than persuasive, and distinguish estimates from guaranteed results.

6.
Which sentence best analyzes the projected earnings rather than merely repeating the figures?
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7.
Which transition most clearly connects these sentences?
“Postcard work can be spread across several afternoons. _____, trivia needs several volunteers at one scheduled event.”
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8.
Which revision of “Trivia makes more money” is most precise and appropriately qualified?
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9.
A classmate adds: “Trivia is obviously the awesome choice because postcards are boring.” Which replacement best maintains a formal, objective style?
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10.
The writer wants to add one table so readers can quickly compare the financial estimates. Which set of columns would best serve that purpose?
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11.
Which sentence would best strengthen the conclusion without introducing unsupported information?
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Build a revised comparison

Write original sentences using the fictional scenario. Explain relationships between details instead of listing facts. Do not copy sentences from the earlier answer choices.

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Introduction plan: Write two sentences for classmates who have not read the proposals. Introduce both fundraisers and preview two or three shared criteria you will use to compare them. Do not recommend a winner.
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Body paragraph: Write four to six sentences comparing the plans' financial benefits and uncertainties. Include at least two accurate numerical details, explain what those details mean, and use a transition to connect the plans. Define net earnings in your explanation.
14.
Conclusion: Write two or three sentences explaining what the comparison reveals and what information the class still needs before deciding. Connect a financial consideration with a staffing consideration. Do not introduce a new fundraiser.