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Peer Feedback: Revising a Crayfish Report

Use a partner's comments to revise and edit a student's first draft of a report about crayfish in a creek.

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Format: Interactive · Printable
Grade: Grade 4
Subject: ELA
Question types: Fill in the blank, Multiple choice, Circle the answer, Sorting, Short answer

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What students practice

Students use a partner's comments to revise a draft for clear ideas, exact words and linking words.
Students tell revising apart from editing and fix spelling, capital letters and word errors.
Students give a peer helpful feedback on a draft.

How to use

Read Omar's draft aloud, then have partners work through the questions as if they were giving Omar feedback. Students can use the last question to practice peer comments on their own drafts.

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Common Core standard covered

W.4.5

With peer and adult help, strengthen writing by planning, revising, and editing.

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Peer Feedback: Revising a Crayfish Report

Use a partner's comments to revise and edit a first draft.

Read Omar's first draft

Omar wrote a first draft of a report. His partner Jada read it and wrote comments. Read the draft. It has some mistakes that Omar will fix.

Omar's First Draft: Crayfish in Miller Creek

1Crayfish are really cool. They live in Miller Creek, the small stream that runs behind our school. Last week, our class put on rubber boots and walked into the shallow water with our teacher to look for them. Our teacher showed us how to lift a rock slowly so the mud would not cloud the water. I wanted to learn what these little animals do all day.

2Crayfish are related to lobsters, and they look like tiny lobsters too. They have a hard outer shell and two big claws. A crayfish uses its claws to grab food and to defend itself. My uncle has a pet turtle named Pickles. When a crayfish grows, it sheds its old shell, and a new, bigger shell hardens in its place.

3During the day, many crayfish hide under rocks or in mud holes along the bank. At night, they come out to look for food. Crayfish eat lots of stuff. Eating dead plants and animals helps keep the creek clean.

4Crayfish walk forward slowly on their legs. They can move fast. If a crayfish is in danger, it flips its tail hard and shoots backward through the water. It moves so quickly that it is hard to catch. Then it hides again under a rock or a pile of leaves.

5We found six crayfish under the flat rocks near the old wooden bridge. Each one was about as long as my finger. Jada held one in a net, and it snapped it's claws at her. we let every crayfish go becuase the creek is there home.

Revise the ideas

Revising means changing ideas, words and order to make writing clearer. Use Jada's comments to help Omar revise.

Jada wrote: "One sentence in paragraph 2 is not about crayfish." Underline that sentence.

Crayfish are related to lobsters, and they look like tiny lobsters too.They have a hard outer shell and two big claws.A crayfish uses its claws to grab food and to defend itself.My uncle has a pet turtle named Pickles.When a crayfish grows, it sheds its old shell, and a new, bigger shell hardens in its place.

Jada wrote: "Your first sentence does not tell me what your report is about." Which new first sentence answers her comment best?

A. Crayfish are really, really cool to me.
B. Our class went outside after lunch last week.
C. There are many kinds of animals in the world.
D. Crayfish are small, clawed animals of the creek.

In paragraph 3, Omar wrote, "Crayfish eat lots of stuff." Jada asked, "What stuff?" Which revision answers her question best?

A. Crayfish eat at night after hiding all day.
B. Crayfish eat bits of plants, insects and dead fish.
C. Crayfish eat with the help of their two big claws.
D. Crayfish eat more than other animals in the creek.

Jada wrote: "In paragraph 4, add a linking word to the start of 'They can move fast.'" Which linking word fits best?

A. Because
B. For example
C. However
D. First

Omar's draft has no ending. Which sentence would make the best concluding sentence for his report?

A. Crayfish are small, but they do a big job in Miller Creek.
B. Pickles the turtle likes to eat lettuce for his lunch.
C. Next, we went back inside to work on our math facts.
D. Lobsters live in the ocean instead of in small creeks.

Edit and give feedback

Editing means fixing spelling, capital letters and punctuation. Help Omar edit, then give your own feedback.

Sort Jada's comments. Does each one ask Omar to revise or to edit?

Take out the sentence about your uncle's turtle.Start the last sentence with a capital letter.Check how you spelled the word "because."Add a linking word to connect ideas in paragraph 4.Take the apostrophe out of "it's" in paragraph 5.Tell more about what crayfish do at night.